To Alice
How’s the sweetest girl in the world?
I wish I could tell you everything about my life right now, but I can’t actually tell you my whereabouts. I can tell you a little about my day, though. Right now I’m listening to some old Frank Sinatra. We’ve got a radio down here and that’s about it for entertainment. I would talk more to my mates here, but I’m working with some real dinosaurs. Not the best for a good conversation.
Anyway, how are you? I hope your dancing lessons are going well. I’m sure that you’re going to be a top rate dancer at the end. Maybe you can teach me some moves when I get back. I’m sure that would be lovely. I hope that you’re prepared for school. I would say make the most of what you have and maybe you can go the the University with me. Alright, I’ve got to get going, but I wrote some poems for you and I’m going to end my letter with one.
A Haiku for you
The world is most dull
With many people sad, bored
You make it brighter
And I’m going to leave you on that note. Hope it wasn’t too cheesy. Please write back.
With love, Harvey
I really like how this letter is written, it's in the form definitely expected of this situation. I think Harvey writing the haiku at the end is an amazing touch.
ReplyDeleteI like how the letter is written with more modern tones as would be expected of the situation. I agree with Michelle, the haiku at the end was an awesome and emotional touch. Just wanted to let you know that you used the twice before University.
ReplyDeleteAwe, Kelly! This is really cute and I love the tone of it all. I was wondering how many letters this piece was going to have and if you were going to have another character sending letters as well to kind of get a side story. Anyway, overall really great so far.
ReplyDeleteI really like your letter Kelly! The haiku at the end adds a great touch and I like the overall tone of the piece a lot. Great work!
ReplyDeleteI really like what you wrote here. It definitely feels like a letter, and the haiku at the end is really cool. Great job,!
ReplyDeleteI love how the letter is emotion-packed, I think it adds a very emotional feel to the passage. I liked the use of the word "dinosaurs" as well. I thought it added a nice humanistic touch to the piece.
ReplyDeleteI like the idea of incorporating letters into your piece! This section sounds realistic, and it definitely adds emotion to your piece to use letters. Interesting idea!
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