That’s when I stopped listening.
Brain processing.
Light bulb. Melissa should go with me. I had never thought of it, she’s just my lame neighbor who always has her face in a book, but she’s the responsible one my mom wants me to go to New York with. It’s only a few train rides anyway and her and my mom are close. Sometimes I think my mom would have wanted her instead of me because she relates to her so well. Stupid neighborhood. I’ll talk about it with her in the morning.
Next day
“Mom, I've made a decision. The next weekend that Melissa goes to NYU, I’ll just accompany her and start finding him.”
“I was thinking the same thing. So it looks like you’re going after all.”
Yes. I will finally be going to New York. The city where my dreams will come true.
I'm curious as to what adventures your character is going to make while in New York City based off of this piece. It wasn't much, but there didn't look to be any things to work on in this portion.
ReplyDeleteThis was a very short part of your paper so right now i'm just a little confused but I'm sure when I read the whole thing it would definitely make better sense. I like your word choices and I did not really find anything wrong with this portion of your novel it was good and had a good flow with your choice of words. Good Job Kelly!! Can't wait to read it.
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